Two English versions of the same short poem can make the beginning move differently before a reader makes any judgment about the original language. Catullus’s poem CI offers a precise example in an 1894 volume containing Richard F. Burton’s verse and Leonard C. Smithers’s prose. We read both displayed versions of that poem, but quote only their brief openings here. The comparison concerns the English words and their presentation, not a claim to determine which translator understood the Latin more accurately.
Keep poem, translator and form attached
The volume’s title page assigns the metrical translation to Burton and the prose portion to Smithers. In its poem CI section, the Latin is followed by the verse version, then a prose paragraph. Those are two named English treatments within one publication, not two anonymous quotations collected from unrelated social posts.
That distinction matters when shopping for a translation or reading an online extract. A book carrying the ancient poet’s name does not identify the translator by itself. A contemporary edition may also add new commentary, editing or artwork. The ancient poem’s age does not automatically establish permission to reproduce those later contributions.
For these particular historical translations, Project Gutenberg’s catalogue identifies the ebook as public domain in the United States. The source title page dates the volume to 1894, and the catalogue supplies both translators’ identities. This is the rights basis checked for the small excerpt below, not a statement that every modern Catullus translation is free to reuse worldwide.
Burton: a beginning that makes travel active
Burton’s verse begins: “Faring thro' many a folk and plowing many a sea-plain”. This is the first displayed verse line. I notice the two activities placed alongside one another: movement through people and movement across water. The English construction makes the act of traveling unusually prominent before the speaker reaches the next line.
The compound image at the end asks me to imagine water as something crossed with a determined physical motion. That is my response to this English phrasing. It does not establish the actual traveler’s route, the means of travel or the translator’s private intention. Nor does it prove that the ancient wording carries exactly the same image.
The line break matters to my reading on the page. Arrival and the address to the brother come in the following displayed line, so I encounter a span of movement first. I find that delay useful: the beginning gives me something to traverse before bringing the speaker to the occasion. Another reader may find the older English manner more interruptive than inviting.
Smithers: begin as someone carried toward arrival
Smithers’s prose opens: “Through many a folk and through many waters borne”. Its phrasing presents travel as something through which the speaker has been carried. The opening’s repeated preposition connects the two expanses, while the final participle lets the sentence move toward the arrival that follows in the same paragraph.
Unlike the verse presentation, the prose paragraph does not place a line ending at that point. I can continue directly into the next clause without a displayed verse boundary. That changes how I choose to pace the opening on a first silent reading. It is a description of this page’s arrangement, not a recording of the way either translator recited it.
I prefer the prose version as a first encounter when I want to follow the speaker’s address without first negotiating an older verse manner. I would then return to Burton for the more conspicuous travel language. Those are different reading invitations rather than a ranking of cultural authority. My preference supplies no translation certificate.
Compare one decision instead of announcing a winner
The useful comparison is narrow: active travel language in a displayed line against a carried journey opening a continuous prose sentence. Both versions belong to the same numbered poem in the source. Neither short excerpt stands in for the whole work, and the comparison should not be stretched into claims about every poem translated by either writer.
A reader can make a small annotation with three entries: where the English action begins, where the displayed line or sentence continues and which version they want to keep reading. This is a literary note, not a vocabulary test. It leaves room to change the preference after reading the complete poem or encountering another carefully identified translation.
Before buying a collected edition, inspect a legitimate sample to confirm the translator, whether the presentation is verse or prose and what the edition actually includes. If the interest is comparing these historical treatments, the identified online source already provides a starting point. A new purchase becomes useful when its particular text, notes or format meets a need, rather than when its cover merely says classic.
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